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托福作文写作范文详解题目:Somepeoplethinkthatparentsshouldteachchildrenhowtobegoodmembersofsociety.Others,however,believethatschoolistheplacetolearnthis.Discussboththeseviewsandgiveyourownopinion.1 .话题和题型分类教育类，双边讨论考题2 .题目分析父母教育VS学校教育3 .思路提示A.父母教育父母更了解孩子学校老师无法单独专注于某个孩子父母是法定监护人8 .学校教育孩子在学校的时间更多学校老师更加专业父母支付了学费，老师因此负有责任SampleAnswerAChiIerseducationhasneverbeenaboutlearninginformationandbasicskillsonly.Ithasalwaysincludedteachingthenextgenerationhowtobegoodmembersofsociety.Therefore,thiscannotbetheresponsibilityoftheparentsalone.（首段开篇摆明观点:教育孩子不仅只是父母的责任）Inordertobeagoodmemberofanysocietytheindividualmustrespectandobeytherulesoftheircommunityandsharetheirvalues.Educatingchildrentounderstandtheneedtoobeyrulesandrespectothersalwaysbeginsinthehomeandiswidelythoughttobetheresponsibilityofparents.TheywillcertainlybethefirsttohelpchildrenlearnwhatisimportantinIifezhowtheyareexpectedtobehaveandwhatroletheywillplayintheirworld.（第二段从父母的角度阐述观点：父母是孩子第一任老师，教育孩子如何为人处事）However,learningtounderstandandsharethevaluesystemofawholesocietycannotbeachievedjustinthehome.Onceachildgoestoschooltheyareenteringawidercommunitywhereteachersandpeerswillhavejustasmuchinfluenceastheirparentsdoathome.Atschool,childrenwillexperienceworkingandlivingwithpeoplefromawholevarietyofbackgroundsfromthewidersociety.Thisexperienceshouldteachthemhowtocooperatewitheachotherandhowtocontributetothelifeoftheircommunity.（第三段从学校的角度阐述观点：上学后老师和同学对孩子的教育也有很大的影响）Tobeavaluablememberofanycommunityisnotlikelearningasimpleskill.Itissomethingthatanindividualgoesonlearningthroughoutlifeanditistheresponsibilityforeverymemberofasocietytotakeresponsibilityforhelpingtheyoungergenerationtobecomeactiveandablemembersofthatsociety.（全文总结升华主题）满分要素剖析：语言表达本文多使用简单句，个别长难句表达严谨，语言简单明了，清晰阐明了作者观点。Educatingchildrentounderstandtheneedtoobeyrulesandrespectothersalwaysbeginsinthehomeandiswidelythoughttobetheresponsibilityofparents.以动名词educatingchildrentounderstandtheneedtoobeyrulesandrespectothers作为句子主语，使得句子更加简洁。Itissomethingthatanindividualgoesonlearningthroughoutlifeanditistheresponsibilityforeverymemberofasocietytotakeresponsibilityforhelpingtheyoungergenerationtobecomeactiveandablemembersofthatsociety.用itissomethingthat和itistheresponsibilityfor这样的句型，使得句子结构平衡，流畅连贯。逻辑结构本文是总分总的结构。第一段作者开门见山直接表明观点，二、三两段分别从父母以及学校方面分析其责任以及对孩子教育的影响，最后一段作者总结全文，并且升华了主题。